Unfair Choice
Life
always seemed unfair, but not as unfair
as it seemed now. What did I honestly do to deserve this? Nothing, I did
absolutely nothing and that, was the
problem. My ‘friend' Makayla, was in
danger. According to her, something was chasing her. Makayla had said and I quote
"As I turned around, it changed
shape." I had asked her what the 'it' was, but the phone line went dead.
I sat there debating whether or not to go and help her, I mean this was the
girl who tormented me for years. By the time I made up my mind, it was too
late.
Nice story, but you should place a period instead of a comma at the part where "... My 'friend' Makayla was in danger." I think that it makes more sense. Also you should add a comma "...according to her, something was chasing her." Other than that its a great story.
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